rangatahi festival

Yesterday we had a rangatahi festival i liked    but have you  been in a rangatahi festival?  .   you rose hill intimate   and there was 17 school

And over 1000 school.  and we had some money .and we can bue some food

To eat .and my mum came to the rangatahi. then my mum  buy me a sosig to eat and then my mum gave me some money then she went

And there was pakistan and there was lots of

School came like rose hill intimate and papakura high and and more than it was our

Torn to perform then my dad came to watch

Me  perform then it was my sister torn then

It was the end of the day to go home

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Wings

cOnce upon a time  those big rats was flying until they heard a sound then they was looking for the sound.

That they can hear then they found the the little boy that

Was making the sound then those mean rats flew to the .little Boy. Then hit him on the head  then the rats said to the Little boy “give me a turn!” Asked the rat  then the rat.

Tried to use the whistle then the ugly rat chucked the whistle. Then the little boy tried to go away from the ugly rat. Then the little boy heart was beating bom bom bom

Because those ugly fat was bullying the little boy .

Then those ugly rat flayed away so then  the little boy

.the girl took the whistle . Then the boy ran back

home were the dark forest with dark trees around

And  some foggy forest and he put some fake wings on him then he flyed with the fake wing . then it fal off

His back .then the ugly rat came back then looked through

In the eye .then the girl came to help him then she use the

Whistle then the ugly rat followed the girl then the boy

Was finding her .then he put the necklace around her neck

the n the girl used her wing and the boy then they flyed

Away from the ugly rat.